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Hello everyone. I apologise for my absence. Work and my computer breaking and a lot of laziness and disenchantment has let me neglect this competition and its winners.

Though there weren't many entries, you all did very well. I had a lot of trouble working my way through but thankfully I judge with a points system and therefore I can't become biased.

First place goes to Blacksand459 for "The Winter Fountains Gush For Thee" . The Winter Fountains Gush For TheeWalk the dark hemisphere till she retires
While glow the heavens with the last steps of day.
My thoughts go up the long dim path of years,
When not a shade of pain or ill,
Like the far roar of rivers,
Thy dark unfathomed wells below,
Of wintry storms, the sullen threat...
Meet in its depths no lovelier ones than ours.
It was for one--oh, only one!
Woo her, when autumnal dyes
Yet tell, in grandeur of decay
The eternal years of God are hers.
And childhood's purity and grace,
Are the folds of thy own young heart
Thy eyes are springs, in whose serene
Cool shades and dews are round my way,
Like one that loves thee nor will let thee pass,
A look of glad and innocent beauty wore.
"When the firmament quivers with daylight's young beam
I'll sing in his delighted ear!
Where, deep in silence and in moss,
Where secret tears have left their trace,
I turn, those gentle eyes to seek."

I turned to thee, for thou wert near;
How thought and feeling flowed like light!
Thy little heart will soon be


This was elegantly crafted and it didn't feel like it was pieced together at all. In fact, it felt like it was composed solely by Stan himself. I commend him on his fine use of language and the emotion it evoked. It was an incredibly original piece, despite it having been pieced together from the words of William Cullen Bryant.

Second place goes to DrippingWords for "a monster's romantics". a monster's romanticsI got a nervous habit and I drink too much.
Can you tell I haven’t slept very well since the last time
that we spoke? “We’re killing time just a little bit faster.”
The words come with a new kind of sadness.
If it looks like Armageddon’s coming down today,
please don’t tell me that I’m dreaming; I can’t tell
if he’s real or a made-up version of her again. And
the hardest part of living is just taking breaths to stay.


This was an interesting piece that I reread a few times. I found new facets each and every time and I found it hard to stop reading it. Thanks for a wonderful piece of work, Caitlin.

Third place was a hard one to decide. Both remaining entries had different strengths and weaknesses. Dorkmaestro 's piece "Contemporary Christian Rock" had strength, passion and flow but I felt like it lacked a good conclusion. I was left wanting more. Perhaps that was the point? blackoutpoet 's piece "New Love" New LoveIn the sea of lovers without ships,
I can't decide if I'll let you save my life or if I'll drown,
But I must learn trust.
was short and succinct and it had a wistful beauty about it. Its point was clear but it felt like while it was talking about trust and letting yourself be vulnerable, there wasn't a lot of that vulnerability in the piece. I realise these are Christina Perri's words and not yours, but it felt a little hollow.

Their scores were tied and so it is up to my own judgment for the third place winner. I give it to Dorkmaestro as while it felt unfinished, her piece evoked more. Thanks blackoutpoet for showing us the beauty of subtle vulnerability.

I will give all their prizes in a few days. I am waiting on my pay.

Thanks everyone.

Kiwi out.

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Rondeaus in juillet is our latest challenge. Juillet is the French word for July and as such we have chosen a French form to highlight and celebrate this month. There are a few variations of the Rondeau and we are going to focus on three of them.

:rose: The Rondeau is a three stanza poem consisting of three main restrictions: refrains, rhyme and meter. You can use either iambic tetrameter or pentameter. The stanzas are specific length (5lines – 4 lines – 6lines) and follow the structure below.

line 1 - A (normally the first phrase is the refrain)
line 2 - a
line 3 - b
line 4 - b

line 5 - a
line 6 - a
line 7 - a
line 8 - b
line 9 - A

line 10 - a
line 11 - a
line 12 - b
line 13 - b
line 14 - a
line 15 - A


Deadly Dance by tigerpusen05

Deadly DanceWe spin around, our circles flow
And in the sky the small stars glow
We dance a deadly dance, we two
My body melting into you
You wish to take me down below
It feels so very long ago
Before you turned into a foe
Do you recall how the wind blew?
We spin around
My back is arched just like a bow
You hold me close, not letting go
I pray you feel enough to rue
You stole me from the heavens blue
We spin around



:rose: The Rondelet is the second variation of the rondeau. It is a small 7 line, 1 stanza poem which comprises of rhymes, meter, refrains and a combination of 4 syllable and 8 syllable lines.  Again the meter can be terameter or pentameter.

line 1 - 4 syllables - A
line 2 - 8 syllables - b
line 3 - 4 syllables - A
line 4 - 8 syllables - a
line 5 - 8 syllables - b
line 6 - 8 syllables - b
line 7 - 4 syllables – A


dfc 12-11: rondelet  by deinktvis

dfc 12-11: rondeletsix-sided dice,
with friends, pencils, paper and books;
six-sided dice
act as fates fell, fickle device.
be ye warrior, mage, or crook
what describes the actions ye took?
six-sided dice.



:rose: The Rondeau Redoublé is a more recent creation and it features two 4 lines repeated, rhyme and meter. It is a 25 line poem with four 4-line stanzas and one 5-line stanza.

line 1 - A1
line 2 - B1
line 3 - A2
line 4 – B2

line 5 - b
line 6 - a
line 7 - b
line 8 – A1

line 9 - a
line 10 - b
line 11 - a
line 12 – B1

line 13 - b
line 14 - a
line 15 – b
line 16 – A2

line 17 – a
line 18 – b
line 19 - a
line 20 - B2

line 21- b
line 22 - a
line 23 - b
line 24 - a
line 25 – A1 (first part of sentence)


DFC Day 30 – Undeterred by Bluezbreakr

DFC Day 30 - UndeterredLove was always such a fickle word,
Dowsed with asinine and aimless pap,
Spoken very often; rarely heard,
Prone to disappear with lightest snap.
Broke she on the last time she recapped
All the suffering that I'd incurred.
Said she as she rose up from my lap,
"Love was always such a fickle word."
Scribbled notes I sent her, for to stir
Sentiments from old romantic scraps.
Called she all my letters nigh absurd,
Dowsed with asinine and aimless pap.
Crossed we several times in social traps,
Thought me my excuses I'd reword.
Sat she, though, beside some mousy chap,
Spoken very often; rarely heard.
All my seeking after her was spurred
When she from his fleshy arms unwrapped.
Though she faded off to scenes unheard,
Prone to disappear with lightest snap.
Nearing me, my strained shoulders she tapped,
Ardor for my passions undeterred.
Tired of her old, insipid sap,
Faintly in my cold ear she whispered:
"Love was always such a fickle word."


This challenge runs for the entirety of July and all entries can be collected in our folder :).

Have a wonderful July!

Kiwi out :heart:
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Blacksand459 Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hi! I just sent you a note with my May Mixup contest submission. Good luck to everyone! :)
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner May 30, 2014   Writer
Awesome, thanks :)
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Blacksand459 Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're most welcome! :)
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I had so much fun with DFC this year :)
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014   Writer
And we loved having you :huggle:
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Or rather...last year! :giggle:
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

I think this is a wonderful endeavor, but S.A.D.ly I haven't the emotional energy to follow or participate in such a vigorous platform.

I admire those who do - have a marvelous season. 

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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013   Writer
Thanks for letting us know, feel free to use this reference material when you're in a better place :).
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